Chatting with Past

Chatting with past
Present moving fast
Deciding about the future
While straightening my posture.

I am not ashamed
At least feeling not framed
Feelings once I held
Seem to have diminished and clearly dealt.

Roads of the heart are now empty
For the one I am waiting for shall be my bounty
Love in loads reside inside
Ice like sculpture from outside

©Kritika



Published by Kritika

Impressive about me is my eagerness to try everything. Self Motivation is a fixed gear of my creativity vehicle provoking me to dance to the tune of optimism. Yoga and books are the two transducers of this victim which have helped to be straightforward and open minded. Improvement is the second gear which is under construction and will always be undergoing changes simultaneously achieving different goals. There are other supporting gears with less of speed more of energy. This is KRITIKA 🙂

10 Comments

  5. Hi, sorry this is late, but been really bust. Your poem, “I thought I will meet someone” is a cleaver and interesting work. But I think the tense is not right. I struggled with this for a while and went back to the grammar sites to make sure. The word “will” that’s used in the title can only be used for the future tense. I believe it should be changed to “would”. “I thought I would have met someone.” Once done, each stanza is then changed to the past tense. This way the title and the poem are in the same tense.
    Take care,
    Stilly

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